hi Lisa,
it seems like you have pretty much all of it correct. I only have a few minor general corrections. The dots above y and o were just the way the letters were written, but are read y and ø. In most cases a colon should be read as a dot, so with the minor changes it looks like this:
Dom. 23. p. Trinit. Niels gyrups i Jalstrup og Johanne Christendtr
Tvillinger 1. Søn Jens og 1. Daatter Dorothe hvis faddere
vare Min Hustrue Metthe Hegelund og Maren Lavridsdtr, Ane
Plogmands og Sophie Povelsdtr. Christen Jensøn, Peder Nørgaard,
og Anders Mortensøn, Laust Rolighed, Peter i Rolighed, og
Niels Henrichsøn Potlitz.
I've also added a s in gyrup as it for me seems like there's an s at the end.
Kind regards,
Lennarth